T2+My+Writting

__Monday 4 2011__ as I woke up my head stung like I had been kicked by a horse. I was lying in a soft bed it had a wooden frame and a red cover. the room I was in didn’t really no where I was. The walls were all stone. The roof was also stone,to the left of my bed there was a window but it was to far away to see out of. I was curious to look out of it so I started to get out of bed, but as soon as I moved my head started stinging even more. I put my hand to my head. I found there was a huge lump in the side of my head, I was starting to believe that I might have really been kick by a horse. I tried to remember how I got the lump. I couldn’t remember anything All I knew was that my name was Leo and that I was 14 I tried to think if I had any family, I could only remember a elderly woman. all I could pick out was that she was wearing a robe and that she had long white hair. She was the only person I could remember. I slowly got out of bed trying not to move my head to much I then walked over to the window. curiously I peered out the window I could see a massive village straight out in front of me then to the right i could see a midnight blue rive rushing down from some mountains in the distance. then I heard a voice it came out of no where I twisted around to see a girl about my age. She had dark brown hair and sapphire blue eyes. She looked familiar but i could figure out who it was. “Is your head must be better Leo” she said happily “who are you” I asked in a confused voice. “and where am I” “you don’t know me?” she said worriedly “no” I replay “are you my sister” “no i’m your best friend” she exclaimed “who are you” I said “Thaila” she said “where am I” I said “in jail” She replied “Why is a jail in so high and got such a view” “so you can’t escape I suppose” “but there is a window?” “okay go escape out the window” she said sarcastically “its not that far if your on your tiptoes you can reach” “really” I said just to annoy her “No”she said “come on we need to get out now” “what do you mean get out” “did you break in” “I never broke any thing” she said “here i brought you disguise hopefully they won’t recognize you” “so do I” I put on the disguise. it was just some chain-mail, It had a red cloth with a golden loin on it. there was a silver steel helmet to, It also had a golden loin on it. We headed down the stairs, I kept asking her questions but she told me to be quit and she would explain later. as we neared the bottom of the stairs we started to go slower and more careful

**Target - Next Steps** **Use a variety of sentence beginnings and lengths for effect e.g. Looking out of the window curiously ... Feeling the large lump just above my ear, I tried to remember ...**

**Paint a picture with descriptive language in the readers head. What was the bed like? e.g. a soft large bed with racing cars printed on the cover ...**

**Great start to the story, I am hooked and want to know how it ends.**

__Wednesday 22 2011__

I woke up my head stung like I had been kicked by a horse. I was lying in a bed I didn’t really no where I was. The walls were all stone. The roof was also stone.to the left of my bed there was a window but it was to far away to see out of. I was curious to look out of it so I started to get out of bed, but as soon as I moved my head started stinging even more. I put my hand to my head. I found there was a huge lump in the side of my head, I was starting to believe that I might have really been kick by a horse. I tried to remember how I got the lump. I couldn’t remember anything All I knew was that my name was Leo and that I was 14 I tried to think if I had any family, I could only remember a elderly woman. all I could pick out was that she was wearing a robe and that she had long white hair. She was the only person I could remember. I slowly got out of bed trying not to move my head to much I then walked over to the window. When I looked out the window I was amazed how high I was. I peered out the window i could see a massive village straight out in front of me then to the right i could see a midnight blue rive rushing down from some mountains in the distance. then from behind me a herd a voice that sounded familiar I twisted around to see a girl about my age. She had dark brown hair and sapphire blue eyes. She looked familiar but i could figure out who it was. “Is your head must be better Leo” she said happily “who are you” I asked in a confused voice. “and where am I” “you don’t know me?” she said worriedly “no” I replay “Im your best friend Thaila” she exclaimed “now answer my other question where am I” I said

__tuesday 21 2011__

Scaffold
 * **Setting:** castle in france, on top of a lush emerald hill to the north of the hill is a valley with a village in it ,to the east there are cliff faces on a very large mountain. to the south is a midnight blue river rushing over a water fall and to the west is a cluster of hills. ||
 * **Character:**
 * Leo:** Leo is a only child who is 14. He likes to


 * Thaila**: Thaila is 14 and has a brother, Leaf . Thaila is funny and likes hanging out with her friends ||
 * **Background:** Leo wakes up in a castle in france he has no idea were he is ||
 * **Interesting story element:** ||


 * **Orientation (who, where, when, what)**

1. Leo wakes up in a room with a stone walls 2. Leo see’s thaila walk past 3. leo gets up and goes to her to ask were they were. 4. Thaila says where they are 5. Leo finds out that he is in the middle of a war 6. Thaila is surprised that he did not no said that the knock to his head was worst than she expected leo then asked what knock thaila then ask’s him if he doesn't remember.leo replays no 7. thaila tells him he will pick up what
 * france castle
 * Leo and thaila are best friends ||
 * **Plot:**
 * 1) Leo wakes up and see’s out the window of the room and founds out that he is in a castle
 * 2) To be continued ||

Draft

I woke up my head stung like I had been kicked by a horse. I was lying in a bed I didn’t really no where I was. The walls are all stone there was a window but it was to far away to see out of. I was about to get out of bed, but as soon as I moved my head started stinging even more. I put my hand to my head there was a huge lump in the side of my head, I was starting to believe that i might have really been kick by a horse. I tried to remember how I got the lump. I then realized that I didn’t no who I was or where I am tried to think if I had any family, I could only remember a elderly woman. all I could pick out was that she was wearing a robe and that she had long white hair.